Question

假設(shè)你叫李華。你所在的城市要為明年暑假招聘英語(yǔ)導(dǎo)游，你打算應(yīng)聘。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示，用英語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)備一份面試稿。
1.愛(ài)好英語(yǔ)，口語(yǔ)熟練，經(jīng)常與外國(guó)網(wǎng)友（net-pel)進(jìn)行語(yǔ)音聊天；
2.性格開(kāi)朗，思維敏捷，善于與人溝通；
3.本地人，熟悉所在城市歷史與文化。
注意：
1.字?jǐn)?shù)：100-120；
2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以便行文連貫；
3.開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Hello!
My name is Li Hua. It's a great honor to be here to have this interview for an English guide in the summer vacation.
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Thank you.

Answer 1

Hello!
My name is Li Hua. It’s a great honor to be here to have this interview for an English guide in the summer vacation.
To begin with, as a senior high student, I’m crazy about English and can speak it fluently. I’m used to practicing speaking English in everyday life. For example, I often voice chat with some English net-pels in my spare time, which really contributes to my fluency in oral English. Besides, I’m open-minded, quick in thought and very fond of social practice, which I think is a quality that a good guide should have. Above all, as a native of the city, I know a lot about its history and culture. So I’m sure that the foreigners will appreciate my work and enjoy their stay in our city.
If I am given the chance to be a guide, I’ll spare no effort to do it well. In a word, I’m looking forward to it.
Thank you.

試題分析：本文是一篇給材料作文，或者說(shuō)半開(kāi)放作文，寫(xiě)一份面試稿，實(shí)際上就是寫(xiě)一封信。你打算應(yīng)聘你所在的城市要為明年暑假招聘英語(yǔ)導(dǎo)游，要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出1.愛(ài)好英語(yǔ)，口語(yǔ)熟練，經(jīng)常與外國(guó)網(wǎng)友（net-pel)進(jìn)行語(yǔ)音聊天；2.性格開(kāi)朗，思維敏捷，善于與人溝通；3.本地人，熟悉所在城市歷史與文化和具體要求。在行文中，我們可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。范文中就使用了合理的連詞和較高級(jí)的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，增色不少。
【寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)】：For example, I often voice chat with some English net-pels in my spare time, which really contributes to my fluency in oral English. Besides, I’m open-minded, quick in thought and very fond of social practice, which I think is a quality that a good guide should have. 這兩句， Besides表并列，前后兩個(gè)句子都使用了定語(yǔ)從句。定語(yǔ)從句的使用不僅嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)谋磉_(dá)完整意思，又使文章渾然一體。同時(shí)文章中使用了適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，比如：To begin with，Besides，Above all,等，使用文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，渾然一體。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：書(shū)面表達(dá)中的寫(xiě)信類(lèi)作文，我們首先要完整的正確的表達(dá)出所有的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)。在寫(xiě)作中，如果語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)好的話(huà)，多用較高級(jí)語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，這樣可以使文章增色不少。同時(shí)要合理的使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，這樣文章才能結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，渾然一體。