Question

假如你是李華，向來望江三中參觀的外國朋友介紹學(xué)校綠化美化的情況。內(nèi)容包括：
（1）提高了愛護(hù)校園環(huán)境的意識(shí)；
（2）栽種了許多花草樹木；
（3）養(yǎng)成愛護(hù)環(huán)境的良好習(xí)慣。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 文章的開頭已經(jīng)給出。
Hello, everyone:
Now I’m glad to introduce some work that we have done to improve our school environment.
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Thanks for your listening.

Answer 1

Hello, everyone :
Now I’m glad to introduce some work that we have done to improve our school environment.
First of all, we have made great efforts to have environmental education in our school, so that the teachers and students have got a better understanding of the importance of creating and protecting good environment. Secondly, to make our school beautiful, we have planted many trees, flowers on our campus, which actually has turned our school into a beautiful garden. The most important thing is that we are getting into an environmental friendly habit.
As a result, we now have such a beautiful and clean school with us. Good surroundings, as you know, make it possible for us to study and live happily.
Thanks for your listening.

解析試題分析：考查提綱類作文，要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，向來望江三中參觀的外國朋友介紹學(xué)校綠化美化的情況：包括1. 提高了愛護(hù)校園環(huán)境的意識(shí)；2栽種了許多花草樹木；3養(yǎng)成愛護(hù)環(huán)境的良好習(xí)慣。審題時(shí)注意本文使用的時(shí)態(tài)，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用省略句，倒裝句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句型準(zhǔn)確表述。如范文里面的to make our school beautiful, we have planted many trees, flowers on our campus, which actually has turned our school into a beautiful garden.這句話里面恰當(dāng)?shù)倪\(yùn)用了不定式做目的狀語，和非限制性定語從句，還有要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把文章串聯(lián)起來：First of allSecondly, As a result等等。
考點(diǎn)：考查提綱類短文寫作。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，詞匯句型的選用，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。