Question

19．請你以高三學(xué)生李華的署名給校長發(fā)一封電子郵件，感謝學(xué)校三年來對你的培養(yǎng)和教育，并向?qū)W校提出如下建議：
1．學(xué)校教學(xué)應(yīng)該注重學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)方法的培養(yǎng)
2．學(xué)校應(yīng)該豐富學(xué)生的校園生活
注意：你可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不能透漏你和你們學(xué)校的真實信息．
Dear Principal
I'm writing this letter to you to talk about my view on the teaching methods．In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）The school should instill correct values by giving more lessons on core traditional values．Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）For example，there can be more clubs and hobby groups，so that students can select those extra lessons based on their interest．I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）Thank you．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息請你以高三學(xué)生李華的署名給校長發(fā)一封電子郵件，感謝學(xué)校三年來對你的培養(yǎng)和教育，并向?qū)W校提出如下建議．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：學(xué)校教學(xué)應(yīng)該注重學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)方法的培養(yǎng)；學(xué)校應(yīng)該豐富學(xué)生的校園生活；2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：talk about談?wù)�；In my opinion以我的觀點來看；focus  on關(guān)注；rather than而不是；Moreover而且；based on以…為根據(jù)；
In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）
Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）
I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Principal，
      I'm writing this letter to you to talk about my view on the teaching methods．In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）The school should instill correct values by giving more lessons on core traditional values．Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）For example，there can be more clubs and hobby groups，so that students can select those extra lessons based on their interest．I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）Thank you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．