Question

假如你是高中生李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，以日記的形式，敘述你在5月15日（周六）參加在鄉(xiāng)下草莓采摘節(jié)（Strawberry-picking Festival）的活動(dòng)情況。
你到達(dá)草莓園的方式，時(shí)間，及當(dāng)時(shí)的天氣狀況；
你在草莓采摘節(jié)的所見(jiàn)所聞。
注意：日記格式已給出；詞數(shù)120左右；可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫
Saturday, May15                                               Sunny
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Answer 1

Today, a sunny day, Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.
When the organizer announced the rules of the festival, we were led into the strawberry garden by beautiful girls in red, group by group. While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing. The air was much fresher and cleaner than that in the city we are living in. During the festival, we enjoyed sweet strawberries, watched some exciting performances and learned many stories about the town and its kind people. At about five in the afternoon, we had to say goodbye to the garden and went back home. Both Li Ming and I enjoyed ourselves and hoped to visit the again soon.
What an unforgettable day!

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來(lái).本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)不是很具體,故需要考生進(jìn)行擴(kuò)展，并準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing.這是狀語(yǔ)從句的省略式，
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文屬于提綱類作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫(xiě)作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。