Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)。

假如你是李華。你的兩位朋友Tom與Peter幾天前發(fā)生了爭(zhēng)吵。3月9日是Peter生日，Tom想送他一個(gè)禮物來緩和關(guān)系，修復(fù)友情，特地發(fā)來郵件尋求你的建議。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給Tom回一封郵件：

1．禮物選擇：

2．你的理由；

3．其它和解建議。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)100左右：

2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫：

3．開頭和結(jié)尾己給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Tom,

I'm glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter．

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Best wishes,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Tom,

I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.

As far as I know, Peter is alwaysin poor healthsohecan takemore exerciseby riding a biketo build up his body.In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.

Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important.Ireally hope that we can be good friends forever.

Best wishes,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文要求寫一封郵件，同學(xué)們對(duì)此形式非常熟悉，內(nèi)容也和學(xué)生的生活聯(lián)系密切，所以寫起來應(yīng)該是得心應(yīng)手，寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意的問題是：一、仔細(xì)審題，寫郵件的目的是就道歉的事情尋求建議，所以內(nèi)容要圍繞三個(gè)要點(diǎn)展開。二、在寫郵件時(shí)要開門見山提出寫信的目的，就本文而言要首先表明自己對(duì)禮物的建議。三、在篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面，要注意層次性和邏輯性，尤其是在解釋理由方面，可以使用一些表示層次的連詞，如firstly、secondly、besides、what’s more等。四、在語言方面，要簡(jiǎn)潔明了，盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)以提高文章檔次。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本篇書面表達(dá)要點(diǎn)全面，層次清晰。開頭用虛擬語氣的句子委婉地提出了自己的建議。在解釋原因和提出其他建議時(shí)，作者用到了as far asIknow、in the meanwhile、besides、apart from等詞匯和短語，使段落非常具有層次性，而且還用到了定語從句which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.狀語從句Peter is alwaysin poor healthsohecan takemore exerciseby riding a biketo build up his body，No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important.Ireally hope that we can be good friends forever.等復(fù)合句，顯示了作者對(duì)句型結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確把握，成為了文章的亮點(diǎn)。