Question

書面表達（10分）

以”How to prevent accidents(如何阻止事故)”為題寫一篇小短文.

提示： Walk on the sidewalk

Cross the street at the crosswalk

Pay attention to the traffic lights

Don’t read while walking

Don’t play with others while walking

Check your bike often

Follow the traffic signs and rules

Always wear a helmet(防護帽)

寫作要求：1.字數(shù)80詞左右 2.作文中用到所給出的句子

Answer 1

How to Prevent Accidents

With the development of the society, the road is becoming more and more crowded. So we must be careful to prevent accidents. Here is some advice to follow.

First, we should walk on the sidewalk and cross the street at the crosswalk. In this way we can avoid many cars on the road. Second, we should pay attention to the traffic lights. We mustn’t cross the road when the light is red. We should follow the traffic signs and rules. Third, we can’t read and play with others while walking because it is very dangerous. At last, we should check our bike often to see if there is something wrong. Also, we should always wear a helmet when riding bikes.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以How to Prevent Accidents為題寫一篇作文，旨在讓我們注意交通安全，防止事故的發(fā)生。在題目中給我們列出了一個提綱，即一些防止事故發(fā)生的建議，如走人行橫道、注意交通燈、遵守交通規(guī)則、走路時不能看書或打鬧、騎車戴安全帽等。我們可以根據(jù)這些提示來組織我們的短文，并且題目要求這些給出的句子在短文中一定要用上，所以我們不能遺漏要點。在這些內(nèi)容的組織上，我們可以不用按照題目中給出的順序，按照自己表達的需要，更合理的把這些內(nèi)容串聯(lián)起來，使文章意思銜接緊密，表達連貫。通過分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時、第一人稱來敘述，因此在動詞形式上比較簡單。但是我們應(yīng)多使用連詞或好的句型，來使文章更有表現(xiàn)力。

【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。首先作者先點明主題，With the development of the society, the road is becoming more and more crowded. So we must be careful to prevent accidents.，因為道路越來越擁擠了，所以我們要注意防止事故發(fā)生；接下來作者另起一段給我們提了一些建議，用first, second這樣表示先后順序的詞分成幾個層次來表達。這是文章的中心，這一部分中作者并沒有完全按照題目中給出的幾個句子的順序來表達，而是根據(jù)表達的需要，調(diào)整了他們的順序，這樣更加合理。這里作者用到的好的句式有如we should pay attention to the traffic lights. 、We mustn’t cross the road when the light is red.、We should follow the traffic signs and rules、we should check our bike often to see if there is something wrong.等。

考點：提綱類作文。