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4．每年夏天，溺水事故頻發(fā)．請你就此寫一篇短文談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />內(nèi)容包括：
（1）我們應(yīng)該如何防止此類事故發(fā)生？（兩點建議）
（2）如果看到有人落水，我們應(yīng)該如何施救？
（3）呼吁同學(xué)們熱愛生命，注意安全．
作文要求：1不能照抄原文；不得在作文中提到出現(xiàn)的學(xué)校真實姓名．
2語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個左右．作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)，也不必抄寫在答題卡上．
Almost every year in summer，many people are reported dead from drowning accidents．How to prevent such sad accidents？In my opinion，we shouldn't go swimming in dangerous places or places，such as reservoirs and rivers．Second，we had better not swim when we feel tired or hungry．
If we see someone fall into the water，we should save him in aproper way．For example，we can shout loudly as we can to get those with good swimming skills to help him．
Life is valuable．We should take it seriously．We must remember that safety should always come first while swimming．．

Answer 1

分析 本文涉及的內(nèi)容正好是當(dāng)下比較嚴(yán)重的一個問題，我認(rèn)為，本篇書面表達(dá)不但考查了學(xué)生的知識，又給學(xué)生反思的機(jī)會，寫作要點包括：1．如何防止溺水事件的發(fā)生．2．見到落水人員，應(yīng)該如何辦．3．發(fā)出呼吁，注意安全．由于這是一篇針對現(xiàn)實的評論，故可用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．

解答 Almost every year in summer，many people are reported dead from drowning accidents．How to prevent such sad accidents？In
my opinion，we shouldn't go swimming in dangerous places or places，such as reservoirs and  rivers．Second，we had better not
swim when we feel tired or hungry．
   If we see someone fall into the water，we should save him in a proper way．For example，we can shout loudly as we can to
get those with good swimming skills to help him．
   Life is valuable．We should take it seriously．We must remember that safety should always come first while swimming．

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